Look!  This is my room.① It's really tidy,② There is④ a desk in my room. On the desk there are④ some books and a computer. And③ my bed is beside the desk.I like my bed very much because it's comfortable②（舒适的）.Next to the bed there is a sofa.You can see a dog on the sofa. And its name is Wang wang. My room is not very big,② but③ it's very nice.② What do you think?

　　点评：本文开门见山，用Look! -词迅速吸引注意力，之后用①句直接引入主题，介绍自己的房间。

　　并且用了一些优美的形容词②tidy，big，nice，comfortable等抒发了自己的感受。

　　此外，在描述房间内物品时用到了书桌一床一沙发一狗的顺序，使文章流畅、自然。

　　文章主体部分在介绍物品时用到了there be句型，巧妙地和含有介词的句子交错使用，避免了重复。

　　结构方面，小作者使用了总一分一总的结构，使文章具有层次感
 

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